wasn't sure where to put this :D feel free to move it if needed.


for my writing class we have to write a narrative about something major that has happened in our life, it has to be 3 to 5 pages.

im going to write about the day df left.

if anyone wants to give me ideas for my outline or want to give some "feelings and emmotions" you went through that would really help.

i really suck at writing but i want to write this really well :D
thanks in advance:D

maybe you could talk about how you felt before and how you prepared, then about the actually day he left and then about how you have been dealing with it. hope it helps!

maybe you could talk about how you felt before and how you prepared, then about the actually day he left and then about how you have been dealing with it. hope it helps!

I agree

We're doing something similar in my Adv. Comp. class right now. Just make sure you use lots of description, so people understand your emotions and it doesn't read like a laundry list of events (I've always had a hard time with that part). You could write about finding out he was deploying, what it was like leading up to the deployment (pre-deployment training), the day/night before he deployed, the day of, and the day after/what it is like now...just so people can understand the impact of that day, before it happened and since its happened. Good luck!

I'll let you read the paper I wrote, maybe it will help you out a bit....


Deployment; Feelings Unknown


I sit back and relax my head against the feathery pillow. My mind drifts off to a place of security, where my heart can finally rest at ease. I hear his faint voice coming from a deep, dark corner. He mutters, “I love you like the wind blows,” and slowly, he drifts away. I wake up! Silence, once again. There is a slow, painful ache in my heart that cannot be reassured. I gasp for air, and start instantly praying for God to bring him home safely. Where I am, it’s dark and dreary. Where I am; I am alone. The phone starts ringing. I look deeply into the dust and cracks of the broken cell phone screen, and see no sign of the number I was hoping to see. I hit the silent button, and take a deep breath again, as if trying not to cry. It feels like a knife is stabbing me in the chest as I can barely begin to endure the pain that this deployment has put upon me. I long for him. His soft hand, his touch, and the sense of serenity he brings to my heart. I reach out, as if to hold him once again, and still there is nothing. Deployment has taken its toll.
You can’t reach out and touch it. You can’t see it. You just feel it. It has a presence among you that makes your heart ache. When the troops are sent overseas to fight battles between us and other foreign lands, that’s when deployment takes place. They are trained and well-rounded to fight for the land that they take pride in; the USA! Deployment has one effect on the troops, and a whole other effect on the family, friends, and loved ones that the troops have to leave behind. In my case, I’m a proud U.S. Marine Corps Girlfriend. I am behind my Marine 100 percent!
I tell you what though; deployment can really bring me down in the dumps. It has its good times and it’s bad. It can be as peaceful as the birds chirping on a bright summer day. On the other hand, I’m lost. I hear about troops being killed in Iraq on the news and I’m suddenly like a deer caught in the headlights of an oncoming train. When my phone rings, and it’s him, my mind gets to rest; finally. After that couple of minutes is up, I feel a sense of pain, sadness, weakness, and frustration. I hear nothing, but the sound of the dishes being rinsed in the dishwasher, or the pounding of nails into the shed that the neighbors are currently building outside. I sit in silence for so many moments, pondering. What will come next? Will I feel this heartache all day long, or will I stand up and be proud and always have faith in God to bring him home safely? The nights are long. I can’t sleep, as dreams of Chris are always on my mind. The days drag on. Three hours seems like a full day. I’m aware of my surroundings. I focus on what people say about the War, and about the President ten times more than I would if Chris was here, at home. I see happy families. The people who have no care in the World because they are surrounded by their loved ones every day. I hear laughter among children who will have no idea, for years to come, what this World is truly about. It’s hard to go about my normal, daily routine, knowing that the man I love is fighting a War thousands of miles away. I try to keep myself just as busy, if not busier than I think he is. This way, I feel like a part of me is doing my job as much as he is doing his. Deployment is powerful. It’s inevitable. It takes over your mind, if you let it. It’s like being on a vacation and then coming home to nothing, and no one. In one small second, your whole World can come crashing down, and suddenly you are alone. You feel like you just went through an extremely bad break up, when really, you are still engaged in an extremely loving relationship. When I receive letters in the mail, I cry. With his poetic words, I lose all sight of him being gone. My Marine is a poet, a man with words so sweet that I fall short of breath while reading. An insert from his letter:
“Dear Love, its 12:15 on a Wednesday, and I’m sitting here in my humvee. I’ll be here all night. I’ve got nothing to do to pass the time, but the thought of you is on my mind. It seems that time goes by slower here, with every minute that creeps by, images and memories of us keeps playing in my head. I miss the smell of your skin, and the taste of your lips. I would give anything to hold you right now, just for a moment. You are everything I prayed for, and everything I need. I feel so blessed to have you in my life, and I can’t wait to fall in love with you over and over again every day, for the rest of our lives. I know, in my heart, that you will wait for me, however long it takes. I love you so much for that. You are such a strong person. It must be harder for you, and it’s not going to get any easier.”
These words reassure me, that every day must go on. I must breathe deep, in hopes, that he is safe with God. My heart is with him through all of this, and he knows. I can tell by his letters. I’ll sit and read them over and over again because it makes me feel like I have something to keep being strong for. He wants to come home just as much as I want him here. He’s missing me twice as much as I’m missing him. I feel peace with these letters. I feel happiness and courage to pull through.
There is one basic step to deployment and that is staying strong. You have to be strong for yourself, but mainly, you have to be strong for him. Keep busy and focus on yourself while he’s gone. Keep him in your prayers each and every day. You might feel like you are in the dark sometimes, but you just have to hold your head up high and look to the stars. There will come a day when he will be home safely and in your arms again. Deployment has its ups and downs. I’m still dreading the next 5 months until I get to see the love of my life again, but I will remain busy and keep my mind occupied with good thoughts. Instead of being in that dark, dreary place, I’m going to put up a fight with my mind. I will push myself to try and get lost in the happiness that is to come when he steps off that bus in April. Deployment; nothing but a rush of feelings!

I hope this helps..:D:dunno

Haha...

SpTaAsCsYMoRe- thank you soo much, that really helps!

You are very welcome dear! :) Anything I can do to help I will, because I know if it was me; you all would be there too. Goodluck to you, you'll have to send me your final result! :):P;)

maybe you could talk about how you felt before and how you prepared, then about the actually day he left and then about how you have been dealing with it. hope it helps!

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